The mysterious dark haired girl pops up once again and to Winston Smith's surprise she hands him a note that says "I Love You." Winston is now caught with a whirlwind of thoughts. He thinks maybe this is too good to be true and maybe she is still a member of the thought police. The thought of her actually being open and upfront makes Winston feel a great deal of passion towards life and the fear of getting caught is somewhat exciting to him and to readers as well. The secret new bond he forms is captivating and adds a twist to this novel.
In life people may look to someone and might love them deeply but try to look past that by thinking they are their enemy. Winston had picked on the dark haired girl for some time about how he dislikes her and the that fact she is in the Anti-Sex League. However, when he realizes she loves him, his world changes and he looks for the good in this. Feelings of how the relationship would work or if they would even be able to see each other is some thoughts that run past him.
In our society, the government doesn't have a say in who you can love or not. You are free and open to love anyone. The fear of getting caught though brings excitement in his life and not knowing what to expect makes readers feel intrigued to read more.
3 comments:
"Whirlwind of thoughts." - You have a good sense of how to convey your thoughts so that you create a certain image for and interest the reader.
You also have a strong conclusion.
The second paragrapgh could flow more. aybe you could say "when he realises that she loves him, many of his views on life change; instead of thinking of his diary and The Party he begins o devise plans to make a relationship work with Julia."
Again, your introductory sentence is good as it grabs the reader’s attention. The way you phrase your words also improves the quality of writing. The use of reference to our society also helps convey your thoughts well. However, I suggest you work on your intro and conclusion because they do not mirror each other. Also more analysis would further improve your work.
This is a good post; you had a good attention grabber and a great conclusion. Although try to convey your ideas in the intro more in the body.
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